I’ve killed the third person pronouns in my novel. Let’s have a moment of silence to appreciate the loss.
I have also fixed the intros to a few chapters. One of the more morbid things I still need to do is make sure that all the references to the number of people who die throughout the novel are accurate. I wouldn’t want to say that a certain number of people have died and then at some later point use a different number that doesn’t make sense within the context of what’s happened – it’d be pretty hard to explain how there are less people who died than I first said when no one comes back to life (spoooilers!).
This is a sentence that came about from the idea of feeling alone / different than everyone else – it doesn’t have a home in a story yet:
I feel all the same things, but in different quantities or combinations.